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I am an unpublished writer with two almost-complete manuscripts and 258 ideas for others. ;) I live in Northern California, and I love sunshine, good food, and good wine & champagne.
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Prologue and first half of Chapter One–Introduces almost entire “cast of characters”, establishes tone and relationships, and a tiny foreshadowing of conflict. Lexi burst through the front door as if hell itself was on her heels. She slammed the door quickly behind her, the bang echoing through the house. ‘What the hell was that?’ she thought. Hot tears stung her eyes as she pressed back against the cool wood. Her heart was hammering, racing a hundred miles an hour, as she took a deep, shaky breath. ‘It wasn’t supposed to be this way. This is not how it started out’. Her entire body was trembling, fear and shame combining into an emotion she couldn’t name, rising to the surface and threatening to suffocate her. She turned on rubbery legs and locked both locks, then tossed her evening bag onto the sofa. It bounced off the taut white slipcover, smacked the coffee table, and landed on the floor with a thud. “Oh fuck off!” she snapped. Steadying herself with a hand on the back of the sofa, she toed off her high heels and abandoned them there on the floor. She shrugged out of her coat and dropped it, leaving it to cover her shoes in a messy heap. The salmon-pink silk of the floor-length dress she wore clung to her curves and shimmered as she moved, weaving her way into the kitchen. Though she’d already made it far past the point of tipsy, she yanked open the fridge and grabbed the half-full bottle of Veuve Clicquot, then pulled a delicate pink flute from the cupboard. With shaking hands she wrenched the stopper from the bottle and poured, a stream of effervescent bubbles flowing over the side of her glass, forming a fizzy, frothy puddle on the butcher-block island. “God damn waste,” she grumbled, ripping a paper towel from the roll and soaking up the runaway bubbles. Exhausted and pissed off at herself, she carried her glass and the bottle into the living room and sank into her favorite recliner. She held the bottle in one hand and took a sip of the sparkling liquid, feeling the bubbles tickling her tongue before sliding down her throat. ‘Champagne,’ she thought with a bitter shake of her head. ‘It was God damn champagne that got me into this fucking mess.’ She leaned back in the chair, the sweating bottle causing water-mark Rorschach shapes on the silk of her dress, and took a second sip. Her eyes slipped closed, her mind traveling back to the hot June day when it had all begun. “Oh my God,” Christi gushed, dramatically fanning herself with a paper plate as her husband Ross stepped onto the stage. “Is he not the hottest thing you’ve seen in your life? Ever?” She scrambled out of her camp chair, feet landing on the pine-needle-covered ground, as she stood to get a better view. Red curls cascaded down her back, and she flipped several corkscrews out of her face. All the men up on the “auction block” that afternoon wore the same attire. Army-green cargo pants and a tight-as-hell black t-shirt showed off the granite they had–even in retirement–in place of flesh and bone. Janey’s eyes twinkled. “I love how you still swoon over him after all these years.” Christi turned her pretty green eyes to Janey. “Swoon? I don’t swoon!” “You do,” Lexi laughed. “You totally swoon!” A lovely shade of pink crept into Christi’s cheeks and she smiled. “Well he is totally swoon-worthy.” Janey nodded. “He is at that!” “They all are,”Lexi added as she scanned the group of men. “All twenty-six of them!” “You know, Lex, some of them are single…” “Christiiiii…” Lexi didn’t need to finish the warning. “I’m just saying, you can bid on one of them, and then he can do your bidding!” Janey snorted, almost choking on her champagne. “No, Chris.” Lexi’s tone was firm; they’d been through this before. “Just no. Not gonna go there so don’t even start.” “Fine.” Christi made a face and dropped the subject, but Lexi knew she wasn’t giving up. The three of them turned their attention back to the stage where Janey’s husband Hunter held the mic. “Ladies and gentlemen,” he began, his voice booming across the lawn, commanding attention. Fifteen rows of white wooden chairs were arranged facing the stage in a graceful arc on the lawn, and the audience waited expectantly, afternoon cocktails in hand. Hunter was one of the event’s long-time organizers and years ago had appointed himself official Emcee and Auctioneer of the twice-yearly events–and he played the role well. “May I present our final gentleman up for bid this afternoon (saving the best for last), Mr. Ross Morrison.” Ross stepped forward and an appreciative murmur rolled through the crowd. His well-built body was obvious, even through his clothes. “Mr. Morrison served in the US Marine Corp for thirty years before retiring four years ago, and I’m sure he misses the hard work.” There was a light flutter of laughter. “Please take note of the sheer craftsmanship of this handsome man’s physique.” Ross rotated slowly, muscles bunching as he flexed, while Hunter pointed out his attributes with a long cane. “These enormous biceps,” he lightly tapped Ross’s arm, “are made for heavy lifting and hauling; these muscular legs are built for climbing ladders, and this very fine ass,” Hunter gave his butt a cheeky nudge, “is nice to look at while he’s accomplishing the aforementioned tasks.” The audience roared with laughter. Most of the attendees had been coming to these charity auctions for years and they enjoyed Hunter’s humor. “God he loves hamming it up for these events.” Janey tossed her head, the white-blonde highlights in her short, spiky hair glinting in the dappled sunlight that filtered through the tall pines overhead. “Now,” Hunter continued, “before you all get too excited, I should mention that Ross is very much spoken for. He’s married to Christi–the beautiful redhead back there with my gorgeous wife Janey.” He pointed towards the pines, and Christi, still standing, gave the crowd a playful bow. “She is one lucky lady to come home to this prime specimen every night. But for one entire day, he’ll be at the beck and call of the highest bidder. So, let’s start the bidding at $200. “$350!” a woman’s voice rang out. “Well thank you, Gayle–a generous opening! And remember, every dollar raised today goes to a fantastic cause. This year, both auctions–our Midsummer's Eve and Winter Wonderland Ball–support Homes For Our Troops. This is a remarkable non-profit dedicated to building and donating specially adapted homes for our severely wounded veterans. If you’d like more information, Janey has pamphlets on the back table.” Hunter paused as the crowd shifted to look behind them, and Janey waved a pamphlet in the air. “Now, back to the bidding.” “$450!” a woman called out. “$600!” came the gravelly voice of a thin, ancient man leaning on a cane. The bids climbed until the final call. Ross went for $870 to their neighbor Gayle. Her husband Steve had suffered a stroke the previous year, and though he was slowly recovering, he was still in a wheelchair. Gayle’s “Honey-Do” list had been neglected for a year, and she looked both relieved and overjoyed at the thought of Ross tackling it. There was enthusiastic applause as Hunter took a final moment to thank the men who’d volunteered to be auctioned off–most of them Marines, but several from other branches of the military. He offered a very special thank you to everyone who had bid so generously–whether they’d won the bid or not. As the applause began to taper off, a woman’s sultry voice rose above the murmur of the audience. “Don’t we get to bid on you, Hunter?” Laughter rippled through the crowd. “Who was that?” Lexi raised an eyebrow at Janey. “Who do you think?” “Stephanie?” “You got it.” Christi grinned. “Are you gonna bid against her?” Janey’s laughter tinkled through the trees. “Naw, let her buy him for a day. Poor thing’s been after Hunter since she moved to the community seven months ago. She doesn’t understand how he can be so oblivious to her charms.” “Yeah,” Lexi agreed. “She doesn’t know how absolutely devoted he is to you.” It was true. Hunter was completely in love with Janey. Even after thirty years of marriage–and thirty-five together–the adoration between them was palpable. Anyone who’d spent even five minutes in their company would never question it. By this time, Ross was back on stage to auction off his friend, and Hunter, playing to the crowd, very slowly removed his light sport jacket. The sun reflected off his thick silver hair, and his broad shoulders and muscled arms drew more than a few appreciative sighs. For a man in his late 50s, Hunter was a stunner. Janey caught her runaway breath and grabbed Christi’s paper plate, fanning herself with a theatrical flourish. “Now I get why you needed this!” “See?” Christi laughed. “Now who’s swooning?” Stephanie began the bidding at $1,000, a self-satisfied smile playing at the corners of her mouth. She clearly assumed nobody would bid higher. But Maddie, Lexi’s beloved next-door-neighbor, wasn’t letting her off that easily. She sat calmly, hands resting peacefully in her lap, and raised the stakes. Maddie knew Hunter would help her with anything she needed (as Lexi’s husband Mark had done when he was alive), but this wasn’t only about help. She knew Stephanie wanted Hunter, and it was obvious Maddie wanted to make her work–and pay–for him. Bid by bid, the number climbed. When Stephanie’s bid of $1,450 was accepted, Maddie turned to Janey and gave her a sly wink. Suddenly, a high-pitched, piercing scream tore through the air. Lexi jumped to her feet, hands clamped over her ears. Two little girls stood at the far edge of the lawn, next to the last row of chairs. The smaller one stood as rigid as stone, hands fisted at her sides. Her head was thrown back, eyes tightly shut and mouth wide open. Screaming as though she were being tortured. The older girl ran tight circles around her. The shrieking went on and on, and Lexi wondered how a tiny child could make such an enormous racket. It was ear-splitting. Finally, Stephanie–tall, blond, beautiful and visibly irritated–stormed over and seized both girls by the arms, giving them a stern shake. The scream abruptly stopped. Without a word, she marched them towards the community clubhouse, their matching, sunshine-yellow dresses swinging with each angry step. Lexi turned to her friends, her expression deadpan. “Have I told you today how happy I am I don’t have kids?” “Every day,” Janey said with a smile. “And honestly? At times like this, I totally agree. Though I don’t have the strong aversion to them that you do.” “I don’t have a strong aversion! I just never wanted them. Remember what my mother said?” She lifted her pitch to match her mother’s. “You’re just afraid you’ll have a child who’s exactly like you.” “Yeah,” Christi laughed. “And I remember what you said back!” As if on cue, the three of them recited in unison: “No, I’m afraid I’d be a mother just like you!” “Oh my God!” Lexi grinned. “Have I told you that so often that you’ve both memorized it?” “Pretty much!” Christi put a hand on Lexi’s arm. “But seriously, I thought it was pretty damn insightful for a 14-year-old.” “Exactly!” Janey agreed. “And J,” Lexi turned to Janey with affection, “you’re the one who actually gave me ‘permission’ to not want kids, remember?” “Right. Because Hunter and I didn’t want them either. And I hated that she tried to make you feel guilty. It’s not for everyone.” “True. You were the first couple I ever met that didn’t act like having kids was some universal requirement. Then I met you and Ross,” she looked at Christi, “and I realized hey, maybe this is more normal than I thought!” Christi smiled warmly. “And look at us now. Bonded for life. I think it was kismet.” “It was indeed.” Janey grabbed the half-bottle of champagne from the bucket of ice near her feet, and divided it between them. “To kismet.” The three of them touched glasses, the sound like tiny crystal bells in a toast to friendship. “To kismet!”
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SHERI BAGLEY Assignment One: Story Statement Overcome the deep fear of love and loss, and learn to live and love again. Assignment Two: Sketch Antagonist/Antagonistic Force in my story I struggled with this one a bit, because Lexi’s deep fear of losing another person she loves is what works against her in the story, so she’s sort of her own antagonist. BUT, if her actual GOAL is to keep herself insulated from the pain of love and loss, then her best friend Janey could be the antagonist. Janey lovingly manipulates people and circumstances, in her mind doing what she thinks is best for everyone. She’s motivated by love (and a bit of fear of her own) and her manipulations are clearly the catalysts and driving force of the plot, assisting (forcing, really!) Lexi’s character arc in moving forward. At one point I thought maybe Janey was the protagonist–because her goal is clear and measurable–and Lexi was the antagonist, resisting and refusing to let Janey have her way. But Janey dies in Chapter 24 (out of 28, at this point), and where would that leave us? Assignment Three: Breakout Titles FAR ENOUGH AWAY This title came to me fairly early in the writing process, because of something Janey tells Lexi when they’re fighting about one of Janey’s manipulations. “You can’t hold people (you love) far enough away that it won’t hurt when they die!” Because Lexi is intent on keeping people at arm’s length for fear of being devastated when they die (or just leave). NOTHING LEFT TO GIVE In the same argument with Janey, Lexi insists she has nothing left to give–she gave every bit of her best to Mark (her deceased husband, and Janey’s brother). Love Again, Live Again Assignment Four: Genre and Comps Genre: Steamy Romance (Though it may be a little less steamy by the time I’m done!) Comps: The Wings of the Dove by Henry James was the novel that came closest to mine plot-wise, but it was written in 1906! Legacy by Stephanie Fournet comes close, but there isn’t secret manipulation involved, and this one was written in 2015. (Clearly this is something I still need to work on, but I want to get this posted! ) Assignment Five: Logline Three years after Lexi, a widow in her 50s, witnessed the horrifying death of her beloved husband, all she wants to do is cling fiercely to her past. Refusing to entertain the idea of ever loving again, but desperately missing physical intimacy, she allows her best friend to manipulate her into embarking on a journey she would never have imagined, surprising herself and finally allowing healing and love–in the last place she ever expected. Sixth Assignment: Inner Conflict and Secondary Conflict Inner Conflict: Lexi has a couple of reasons for inner conflict: First, she was completely devoted to her husband Mark, and even though he’s been dead for three years, she still has a “relationship” with him. Everything in their bedroom is still the same. His clothes are still in his closet and dresser drawers, the furniture is exactly where it was, etc. She still mourns his passing and is haunted by the fact that she witnessed his death. So she feels guilty for engaging in a physical relationship with someone else. Hypothetical Scenario (for first Inner Conflict): Immediately following the first sexual encounter with Hunter, Lexi starts sobbing, without any thought behind it. She feels like it’s completely out-of-the-blue. The following morning, she realizes that she felt guilty because she enjoyed it, and felt like she was betraying Mark’s memory. Second, after several months, Lexi begins to have little glimmers of emotional attachment to Hunter. They’ve been friends for 30-plus years, but now and then, she feels a bit more than just friendship. However, Hunter “belongs” to someone else, so she stuffs her feelings and refuses to think about them. Hypothetical Scenario (for second Inner Conflict): Janey and Hunter have a big party for their 30th anniversary, and an old friend of theirs (Brandon) pays a lot of attention to Lexi. At the end of the evening, Hunter sort of gives Lexi “permission” to date Brandon. He doesn’t want to hold her back from finding love/happiness. Lexi is taken aback. She doesn’t want to date anyone–the way things are is perfect for her. She can hang onto Mark, and still have a physical relationship that doesn’t “endanger” that. Then she finds out that Hunter and Janey still have a sexual relationship once in a while, and she has a little “mini freak-out”. The following day, Christi asks Lexi if she’s in love with Hunter, and Lexi, who hasn’t wanted to even glance at her feelings, much less examine them closely, denies being in love with him. Secondary Conflict: Once Lexi agrees to enter into a physical relationship with Hunter, she must keep it hidden from everyone in her life except Janey (whose idea it was). Hypothetical Scenario: On the anniversary of Lexi’s husband’s death, Janey sends Hunter over to be with Lexi, knowing that Lexi will most likely be an emotional mess. Lexi and Hunter stay up talking until the wee hours, and then have sexy-time upstairs. Hunter accidentally falls asleep and stays the rest of the night there, something he’s never done. They’re woken up late the next morning by Ross and Christi, coming to bring Lexi breakfast. Seventh and Final Assignment: Setting Most of the scenes take place in and around a 55-and-over gated community (possibly in one of the cooler parts of Arizona–Pine-Top, Lakeside, maybe Flagstaff [though snow might be a little much]). There are three homes they frequent–Janey and Hunter’s, Ross and Christi’s, and Lexi’s–that have similar, but not identical, lay-outs. They have monthly BBQs that take place in a big, open, grassy area near the community clubhouse. There is potential here for other residents of the community to be characters in the story (Lexi’s next-door-neighbor Maddie has a few scenes, as well as a newer, beautiful blond woman named Stephanie who has a mad crush on Hunter), but I need to figure out if they really help to move the story forward. My original thought was to add Maddie so that it wasn’t just the five friends who have no other people in their lives. Other places in the story include a campground up in the mountains, a Tuscan Winery out past the edge of town, a small coffee shop called The Beanery, and an event venue called Solstice, where they have an underground wine-cave. More specifically: Lexi’s kitchen, living room, primary bedroom, Mark’s closet in that bedroom, guest bedroom, roof and side yard (though I might cut that scene). Her front porch and yard. Her back porch and yard. Ross and Christi’s kitchen, dining room, and, because it’s open to the dining area, the living room. Janey and Hunter’s dining area, living room, kitchen, guest bedroom, back yard, primary bedroom and bathroom/shower. The streets of the community where they live, the walking path around the small lake in the community, a playground where the residents can bring their grandchildren. The Tuscan Winery: the front as they pull up in Hunter’s truck, the dining tables in the terraced deck/garden area, the stage where the band is set up. The big, open room inside where all the wineries are set up for the wine-tasting event. The women’s restroom, the hall outside the restroom. The campground: their “family campsite” where their three RVs are set up, sitting around the fire, the women’s restroom at the campground, the roads through the campground, the river that flows through the campground, under an old stone bridge that crosses the river, at a picnic table where they all have breakfast. The Beanery: a sweet little coffee shop with lots of dark wood, dark green upholstery on the comfy sofas and chairs, and on the seats of the dining chairs, lots of plants, creamy white walls. A very comfortable, homey atmosphere. A picnic table near the snack-bar at a small lake near the edge of town.
