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  1. Assignment One: Story Statement End the mob rule so that being stripped of everything was worth it. SECOND ASSIGNMENT: in 200 words or less, sketch the antagonist or antagonistic force in your story. Keep in mind their goals, their background, and the ways they react to the world about them. First a community organizer, EO3 took his skills and became a top ranking spiritual guide of an exclusive fraternity after his son, a young coast guardsman, was murdered as part of the fraternity’s ritual, only for it to be reported as an act of terrorism to justify military action. His creed is chaos and destruction, and so he finds himself at home in an occultist religion that rewards his actions with power. This leads him into a downward spiral of vampirism that has no end, just greater depths. He sacrifices people for power, but his vision always adjusts, leading him to the conclusion that nothing will be dark enough. Realizing he can’t consume enough, he begs the demon to consume him. The way his fraternity feeds the sacrificial demands is by maintaining control over the many facets of Americans’ lives. They’ve had a chokehold over the country and siphoned its resources for a long time, but now, the protagonist and the movement he started stands in their way. He recognizes the waning support for fraternity rule and puts together a plan to shift the mass hypnosis onto the up and coming leaders of the movement. THIRD ASSIGNMENT: Great Plains Eminence The Mammoth FOURTH ASSIGNMENT: The Night Agent (2019) by Matthew Quirk. Also a Netflix series (2025). Like my novel, this book is set in Washington, D.C. and includes a protagonist unwittingly thrust into foiling a government conspiracy. The God of the Woods (2024), like my book, contains an atmospheric mystery involving the elite, as well as a character driven narrative. FIFTH ASSIGNMENT: write your own hook line (logline) with conflict and core wound following the format above. Struggling to regain his sense of personhood after unjust imprisonment, the secretary of homeland security resurrects his populist movement to finally end the mob rule of three elite fraternities that rotate control of the Oval Office and made an example out of him. SIXTH ASSIGNMENT: sketch out the conditions for the inner conflict your protagonist will have. Inner Conflict Avery’s ex-fiancee tells him he can be a better person. This strikes a chord in him. He recognizes how he lost his sense of personhood after his conviction. After his release, he was met with pleas for help from supporters of the movement he started. He is a figure being counted on by the disenfranchised Americans and a threat that needs to be neutralized by the opposition. Now forty, he is unmarried, childless, and owns nothing. He can’t be a better person, or fight for others, if he’s not one at all. Secondary Conflict Avery and President Bradford Vure are brothers, but they became estranged after the fraternity recruited Bradford when he was eighteen. The fraternity used Avery as a prop in a staged terrorist incident to garner support for military operations. After Avery exposed them for doing so, they corrupted his trial to ensure his conviction. Over the years, Vure repeatedly chose the fraternity over his brother. He pardoned Avery as part of a plea for forgiveness, but Avery is resistant to accept it. FINAL ASSIGNMENT: sketch out your setting in detail. This speculative Washington, D.C. is occupied by brothers of three major fraternities that are extremely hostile to our protagonist, Avery. This is a city where restaurant owners are tribalist, mimicry is encouraged, not uncanny, and the secretary of homeland security is a have-not for not being fraternity-unaffiliated. I try to make setting character in the White House, playing up the dramatic, distinct designs of the offices and being intentional with what scenes occur in each color parlor. Also, in this universe, North Sentinel Island is discovered to not be occupied by the world’s only uncontacted tribe, but by a fraternity. They use it for their illegal scientific research and tropical getaways. This was also the location of the staged terrorist incident that started Avery’s ascent into becoming the figure of a political movement. And then there’s the title, ‘Great Plains Eminence’. Caddo, Oklahoma is an important location to Avery, as well as a point of contention in his relationship with his brother. The fraternity demanded his brother, the president, leave behind his history and family when they moved him to the East Coast. The president is still averse to returning, and therefore, to fully apologizing to Avery for his past actions. Avery’s visit to Caddo also showcases the forgotten middle Americans who inspired this story.
  2. These opening pages introduce the protagonist and set the inciting incident into motion. Washington D.C. • • • • Day 1 As Avery Syrus approached the commissary, he met the gaze of a man he knew as “the arsonist” blocking the doors. Complexion pale and tattooed neck glistening with sweat, the man didn’t move. He instead said, “Avery is a trailer trash name.” The blunt assertion almost made Syrus laugh. They had never spoken before. “That’s terrible to hear. Would you like to walk with me and discuss this further?” As he gestured to the doors, a bright glint blinded him. Syrus made out the outline of the six inch knife as it plunged into his shoulder, then felt the vibration of cracking bone reverberate through his body, chattering his teeth. When the arsonist extracted it an instant later, Syrus stumbled backwards onto the ground. Hot blood poured down his chest, and his hands slipped on the tile as he tried to back away. He kicked the man in the stomach, but the arsonist didn’t lunge at him again. With wide eyes, he just stared at the weapon’s blade as it wept scarlet tears. Syrus yelled for the correctional officers at the end of the corridor. With little urgency and no restraints, they ushered his assailant away. After the blood cascade dried and cracked, Syrus wondered why he was allowed to survive being stabbed. The horror of it all played on loop a week after he was operated on and returned the same orange jumpsuit the knife pierced, as denoted by the bloodstain that ran from the clavicle down to the sleeve. It was washed but not scrubbed. Putting it on involved multiple facets of pain. The knife left a curved wound in his shoulder, and his arm stung when he turned his neck. Everyday, a medic with a fixed scowl told him, “We can give you a pill.” “No,” he said. “It doesn’t hurt that much.” He had never been to the infirmary before in four years of incarceration, though he asked for treatment on a few occasions for illness. The nurses denied each request. Perhaps it was for the better, as the private room was sterile white and windowless, and the overhead fluorescent lights never turned off. He didn’t fight it when the warden said it was time for his transfer to protective custody just a week after the attack. That cell ended up being just as unnerving, with stone walls and a metal cot that must have been designed for sleep deprivation. The exhaustion caught up to him. Syrus’s spirit wore down over the years from confinement, and the officers banging on his door at night chipped away at his sanity. He didn’t want to be dramatic, but in trying to reconcile it all with no belief in justice or God, the knife fractured more than his bones. One evening, two weeks into his solitary internment, he didn’t even try to sleep. His eyes fell on the night sky through the barred window and watched the red sunrise. When the winter gray of late morning took hold, they shifted to the metal door as it creaked open. The overhead alarm whined with reluctance, aligning with the attitude of the two officers waiting for him. They weren’t there to confiscate his belongings or gloat that his appeal was denied. They instead presented a guest in a tailored wool suit. Syrus stepped into the doorway of the cell and outstretched his hand to shake that of Landon Cloes, the campaign manager for President-elect Bradford Vure. He was best known for being one third of the ‘tripartisan trio’, a young Washingtonian friend group that consisted of him, a Senator, and the Speaker of the House. They made a performance art out of policy disagreements but all belonged to the same fraternity, the Mammoth. He and Syrus first met several years back but were reacquainted during his visit to the prison in November. “I don’t understand how this could have happened,” Cloes said, grimacing at the discolored jumpsuit. Syrus frowned at the officers. “It was allowed to.” “Have you been attacked before?” “No.” The other inmates left him alone after one of his old friends started paying for their commissary items. They were prone to outbursts of violence, though, unlike the reclusive arsonist. That was the last person Syrus expected to assault him. His shoulder tensed at the memory, and he grunted at the now dull pain. “Well, it’s time to go,” Cloes said, peering at his phone. “You’re officially pardoned.” Syrus’s breath caught in his throat on the inhale. When the gravity of those words set in, he breathed out. Finally. Cloes promised his release during his first visit, but Syrus was only hopeful, not convinced. His life took several sharp turns over the last decade, culminating in the plunge of a life sentence handed to him by a judge with blank eyes and a wry, crooked smile. In his weeks of isolation, he concluded the stabbing was a warning to the incoming president about to pardon him. From his many enemies, a resounding ‘don’t’. But now, the chatty officer who frequently proclaimed his admiration for that judge had nothing quippy to say. He just led them to the gatepoint. Cloes’s mouth curled more at the sight of each bound inmate that passed. He scraped his jacket leaning into the opposite wall. “What happened to the arsonist?” he asked. “Transferred,” the officer said. They never answered Syrus when he asked that question. “And the knife?” “Mr. Syrus misremembered. It was a shank.” Unlikely. When they reached the end of the prison threshold, the officer buzzed them through the three sets of timer-operated doors into reception without any outtake paperwork. On the other side were four straight-faced men in matching heavy khakis and windbreakers. Even without the telling attire, any Washingtonian could identify them as Secret Service by their rigid bearing. With no greeting, one special agent handed Syrus a cardboard box. “Change, quickly,” he said. They directed him to the adjacent restroom where the rusted handle wouldn’t quite lock. After silently acknowledging the significance of pulling off the uniform pants and shirt for the last time, Syrus’s eyes met a dirty mirror under green-tinted lights. They squinted in disbelief. He didn’t recognize the thin, older-looking man before him with a bandage on his shoulder. He never noticed his reflection inside the prison walls. His dark, scraggly hair cast shadows into the lines beside his gray eyes. He shaved two days ago, but the strands that grew in were patched with white. The agent gave him a suit from his own storage unit, but his arms didn’t fill out the navy jacket sleeves. I’m only thirty-nine years old. But what did age matter when no milestones were met? He was childless and unmarried. He owned nothing. He widened his eyes, which creased them more. Cloes and the agents didn’t seem to notice Syrus’s discomposure when they hurried him outside to a government Cadillac that looked identical to the ones he rode in hundreds of times before. When a frigid breeze hit his face and the dead grass crunched beneath his dress shoes, disappointment over the bagginess of his jacket wisped away. The clothes may have appeared starchy in the high noon sun, but they were his own. He was stabbed, but the wound was healing. “Mr. Syrus,” another special agent said. “Get in the car.” He took the backseat, and Secret Service filled the rows ahead of him. After a few minutes, the window defrosted, and Washington materialized. Dull winter coated the museums and landmarks he used to pass on walks, and Syrus anticipated the turns to his old apartment, until they ended up on 2nd Street. “Where are we going?” he asked. “The rest of the Inauguration. They want you on the balcony.” Cloes said, eyes on his phone screen where an image of Syrus was pulled up.
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