Story Statement
The protagonist (Alice) must defeat the foes trying to destroy her Father even as she suspects the man she loves may be part of the plot.
Antagonist Sketch
Claybank is a hired assassin who is very good at his job. Once a promising boxer, Claybank had to retire early because of a bad heart. He turned to crime after a devastating flood killed his oldest son and wiped out his savings. Claybank tells his wife that he became a hired killer to support his family, but that isn’t strictly true—he enjoys the competitive challenge. His wife left him because of his choice (although she still accepts his money), but Claybank is convinced he’ll win her back once he earns enough to retire.
Claybank had refused to harm women and children previously. However, he reluctantly helps in a plot to harm Alice because it will pay him enough to quit and win his wife back. Also, Claybank feels betrayed by those in power due to the flood. He views Alice as a spoiled rich heiress who is part of the corrupt elite.
Potential Titles
-The Wolf Rises in the Heart
-American Princess on the Run: Alice Roosevelt and the Blue Dragon Conspiracy
-The President’s Daughter
Comps
“Opium and Absinthe” by Lydia Kang
“The Nurse’s Secret: A Thrilling Historical Novel Of The Dark Side of Gilded Age New York City” by Amanda Skenandore
Logline
Alice Roosevelt, the most famous women in America in 1905, sees marriage as a way to reach her potential and escape her insensitive Father, but then she discovers the man she loves may be plotting to destroy the president.
Conflict Scenarios
Primary conflict
Alice feels ignored by her Father, an unloved stepchild. She writes in her diary that her Father loves her as 1/8 as much as his other children. Like many other women of her time, Alice seeks a husband to escape a stifling family atmosphere. However, she ends up torn between two suitors—the more conservative Nick and the mysterious Brynmor. When an assassin threatens the president, Alice’s instinct is to try to solve the case to protect her Father, which will also enable her to move on with her life and find fulfillment with a new husband. But when Brynmor is implicated in the plot, she’s torn between him and her family—a feeling exacerbated by her feelings of worthlessness.
Throughout her ordeal, Alice is surrounded by lawmen and others forced to compromise when pursuing justice. In a final twist, Alice must choose between her family and the man she loves and face the question: How do you achieve justice in an unjust world?
Secondary conflict
Alice views herself as an orphan because her grief-stricken Father ignored her as a child after his first wife died. Despite being a celebrity lauded for her beauty, Alice refers to herself as “ugly” and “Poor Alice” in her diary. Her insecurity causes her to seek attention, acting in a way that’s considered outrageous. Due to her feelings of worthlessness, Alice struggles when Brynmor is implicated in the plot, finding it hard to accept the evidence before her eyes. As the proof against him mounts, Brynmor takes advantage of Alice’s insecurity by gaslighting her. However, Alice’s superior intelligence wins out in the end.
Secondary conflict
Because the Secret Service isn’t authorized to protect the president’s family, Teddy Roosevelt strong-arms Bat Masterson to act as a bodyguard for Alice. Bat has no interest in performing this duty as he’s happy as a full-time sportswriter in New York. However, Roosevelt points out that Bat had just accepted a position as a federal deputy marshal for the handsome annual salary of $2,000. Roosevelt expects Bat to earn his money. Bat and Alice immediately clash about who is calling the shots. Alice expects to give the orders, but Bat is a celebrity in his own right and equally strong-willed.
Setting
Alice takes a literal and figurative journey, so the story takes place in multiple settings: Washington, D.C., New York City, Chicago, Sweetwater, Texas, and the Big Pasture in the Oklahoma Territory. A secondary character involved in a subplot travels from Los Angles to San Francisco to the Organ Mountains and finally to the Big Pasture. I changed some settings from indoor meeting rooms to more dynamic locations after reading the NWOE article.
The primary setting is New York at the dawn of the Progressive Era in 1905. Reformers clamor for change in the city; robber barons cling to power. Anarchists and abandoned children roam the streets. A flood of immigrants pours into New York every year. About one in six Americans at this time are foreign-born. The city is a series of armed camps, with the Five Points Gang controlling everything west of the Bowery and the Eastman Gang in charge to the East. Tammany Hall works hand-in-hand with the gangs, providing political protection in exchange for getting out the vote.
The New York settings include Broadway, the “Dreamland” amusement park at Coney Island, East Side wharfs, Chinatown, a bottle factory in Brooklyn, a nickelodeon in Manhattan, a bare-knuckle club, a secret club for cross-dressers in the Bowery and a salt marsh in Oyster Bay (in Long Island).
Another important setting is Washington, D.C. Scenes include the White House grounds and gymnasium; an Embassy Row ballroom; Rosslyn, a corrupt small town close to the Capitol; and “Dead Man’s Hollow,” a wooded ravine just outside of Rosslyn where numerous murders occur.
A third important setting is the Big Pasture, specifically the Wichita Mountains. This area is known for its unusual mix of prairie grasslands and Alpine features—including deep granite gorges, heavily timbered woodlands and clear-water lakes, all surrounded by a pair of rugged mountain ranges.